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       - [ ] resolve more comments
       - [ ] and some more
       - [ ] better define the role of [[patterning]]
-        - [ ] maybe just refer to [[free, fair and alive]] throughout? and cite christopher alexander's and hans widmer's aspirational [[global-scale patterns]]
+        - [ ] maybe just defer to [[free, fair and alive]] throughout? but cite/mention christopher alexander's and hans widmer's aspirational [[global-scale patterns]]
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     - [ ] together with a contributors' agreement
 - [[work]]