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 # towards a knowledge commons
 
-- an [[essay]].
+- a [[draft]].
   - [[pull]] [[commons]] [[knowledge commons]]
 
-As we enter [[2022]], I believe we are in a better position than ever to accomplish many great things as a society -- and this goes for many definitions of society, up to and including the most general and presumably important, that as society as the group of all humans[^1]. In particular I believe that we are entering a renaissance of the internet that will enable it to deliver on the promise of a distributed commons that somewhat stalled in the last fifteen years due to the success of [[anti disintermediation]] as effected by interested parties. But hopefully you won't have to take my belief at face value; let me try to show you why I believe what I believe.
+As we enter [[2022]], I believe we are in a better position than ever to accomplish many great things as a society -- and this goes for many definitions of society, up to and including perhaps the most important, that as society as the group of all humans[^1]. In particular I believe that we are entering a renaissance of the internet that will enable it to deliver on the promise of a distributed commons that stalled somewhat in the last fifteen years due to the success of [[anti disintermediation]] as effected by interested parties. But hopefully you won't have to take my belief at face value; let me try to show you why I think what I think.
 
-[^1]: I myself include [[all sentient beings]] in the most general definition, including those made out of silicon, but that's a topic for a different writeup.
+[^1]: I would myself include [[all sentient beings]] in the most general definition of this group, including those made out of silicon, but that's a topic for a different writing.