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 - [[agora slides]]
 - #push [[debate]]
   - Imagine a public global debate about the crimes of [[Moloch]], and the ways to move forward.
-- #push [[democracy]]
-  - Imagine calling elections in every nation-state currently recognized by the UN, in addition to those called by the state in question -- put succinctly, imagine the citizens of the internet calling for liquid-democracy-based fair elections for Russia, United States, China -- a priori without the authorization of the states in question, but with an intent to cooperate rationally with them.
+- #push [[liquid democracy]]
+  - Imagine calling elections in every nation-state currently recognized by the UN where a group of people think they could be useful. These meaning in addition to those called by the state in question as per custom up-to-date: put succinctly, imagine the citizens of the internet calling for open, transparent, fair, liquid-democracy-advancing elections in Russia, United States, China -- a priori without the authorization of the states in question, but with an intent to cooperate rationally with them.