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@@ -34,13 +34,13 @@ I sincerely hope both company and wider society can recognize the opportunity to
 
 That's what we are setting out to do, anyway. Join me? :)
 
-# Google should be freer, Google should be fairer, Google should again focus on the user
+# Google should be freer, Google should be fairer, Google should be more alive
 
 This letter contains, in as succinct a way as I could muster, a series of specific proposals to [[Google]] and the community of [[users]]. Whenever I couldn't expound in full, I try to include [[links]].
 
 I write this in the context of what some call [[late stage capitalism]] and can safely be alternatively described as [[digital capitalism]] in [[mid 2024]]. I, as a Google employee, am writing to communicate my recommendations as clearly and as harmlessly as possible to both company and society.
 
-My high level intention is the following: to develop, together, a [[commons]] containing a prosocial transparent governance layer for the internet and use it in a daring way to try to advance company, society and civilization. And I intend to convince Google that this is the right thing for both people ("users") and company; I intend to convince you, reader, that we should do this together.
+My high level intention is the following: to develop, together, a [[commons]] containing a prosocial transparent governance layer for the internet and use it in a daring way to try to advance company, society and civilization. I intend to convince Google that this is the right thing for both people ("users") and company; and I intend to convince you, reader, that we should do this together.
 
 ## An Agora is what Google could be, maybe