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 When I say provocatively that "Google" should be more like "an Agora" I mean not the [[Agora]] and [[Google]] exactly as they are in their current form, but rather in their full potential or [[entelechy]]; as per the set of values and intentions most closely aligned with the intent of the [[founders]] or [[stewards]] of a [[company]] or [[community]].
 
-The [[Agora]], in short, is what I call my umbrella proposal, presented as a [[prototype]], to help fix Google and similar systems. That is, I make the argument that the project I started personally and then developed as an informal 120% since around 2020 (see [[Agora project]]), represents a step forward in the right direction as we navigate the mid 20s together. You, [[dear reader]], will be the judge of the merit of these my claims.
+The [[Agora]], in short, is what I call my umbrella proposal, presented as a [[prototype]], to help fix Google and similar systems. That is, I make the argument that the project I started personally and then developed as an informal 120% since around 2020 (see [[Agora project]]), represents a step forward in a good direction as we navigate the mid 20s together. You, [[dear reader]], will be the judge of these claims.
 
-As you read these proposals, please think and report back optionally: if not these proposals, which? This, in a nutshell, is the spirit of the [[Agora]] I am proposing and have been trying to build: it is a [[commons]] focused on finding [[rational]] [[incremental improvements]] achievable by its community. Put another way: if you share proposals for the betterment of society, our endeavors together, or any interesting subset of them, an Agora can be defined that will be interested by default.
+As you read these proposals, keep in mind and optionally report back optionally: if not these proposals, which? This, in a nutshell, is the spirit of the [[Agora]] I am proposing and have been trying to build: it is a [[commons]] focused on finding [[rational]] [[incremental improvements]] achievable by its community. Put another way: if you share proposals for the betterment of society, our endeavors together, or any interesting subset of them, an Agora can be defined that will be interested by default.
 
 ## Google should be fairer
 Google is a corporation and a community of employees (traditionally "Googlers", assumed to be practicing "Googlyness" :) In this letter, we will comment on how Google was and how Google is, and what Google could be (again?).